Tsaphan Babe

Jul 31

writing critique

I posted something on my blog I called “vessel” http://www.tsaphanbabe.net/ and I sincerely don’t know if the writing is garbage (over-the-top sappy) or if it’s decent. If you like honestly critiquing writing, I’d be thrilled if you’d take a look and comment. I have no problem with negative reactions. :-)

Turning off the computer for the day. Thanks in advance, though, if you take the time to read/respond.


  1. shariv67 said: Oops. Got cut off there. If I were you, I’d rewrite it and attempt to retool with an eye towards avoiding cliche metaphors/descriptions, but I like where you’re going with it.
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